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If this is not the appropriate place to post and ask for feedback,I apologize in advance. If it is, I humbly ask for your indulgence. SuzO
Good Morning Girl Friend Remember me? I’ve been sitting here in the shadow of your discontent Waiting for you to summon me For conversation and reflection. You know girl, I’m always here for you. We’ve been through a lot together You and I against the rest of the world That’s how it felt so many times I lost count. Why do you wait so long to call forth your wisdom? You know it never fails you. Yet, wait you do until the flotsam and jetsam of life Rise to your very nostrils. Why you do that Girl is beyond me. Your wisdom and your common sense Tell you when the quicksand, muck and mire are rising. You insist on staying in denial Until your back is to the wall of pain and agony. Again. Girl, you know you don’t have to do that. Pain is not the only indicator that you need to change direction. Why do you ignore your flashes of insight and intuition? They always need to knock down the damn door When a light tap should do. Why do you ignore the signs along the way? Girl, they are etched in your gray matter. They are part of who you are, not to be denied. You worked too hard putting these sentinels in place. They’ve put down roots, so don’t even think of turning your back on them. They are your creation from your Wise Time and your power. You count on them in your Now Time When you feel all nasty and confused. You’re gonna be all right Girl Cause out of this solid Bank of Power and Wisdom You can make unlimited withdrawals Only you got to pay the price You can pay now or pay later Keep on checking those statements Of debits and credits The visual cannot be denied Even by the queen of de-nial And when you’re ready Girl We will rise up and whomp their butt Cause you got the power and the wisdom Soon, you’ll find the strength Then, ain’t nobody gonna do you in again. |
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I'd post it in the electic pen. http://www.paperbackswap.com/the_eclectic_pen/index.php
Either that or there's another good site where writers can post their creative writing & get feedback. Editred is completely free and you get lots of constructive feedback. Last Edited on: 4/30/08 2:39 PM ET - Total times edited: 2 |
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I like the perspective that you chose. It's very good. |
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Thank you for responding! I thought I was out in space somewhere and couldn't be seen. |
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