The Eclectic Pen - Fights last forever.


By: Kami (Kidsey)   + 9 more  
Date Submitted: 3/6/2009
Last Updated: 3/6/2009
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You know when they are about to fight. Having four kids, there is an unusual silence in the house. No playing, breath taking silence. Dad watches T.V. Mom does dishes. We sit. Silently. So silently. Dad hollers. Mom screams. Dad raises his voice. They dash back and fourth. Excuses, excuses. We cry. They throw things. There is a silence amoung us. We escape to the stillness of our rooms. But we can hear them. We can always hear them. No matter where they are. They frighten us. We take sides, though we have nothing to do with it. We run outside when it gets too loud. All we want is silence. No screaming or crying or pain. The dog sometimes follows us. Never ending. We are scarred for live. Never ending, until dark. Both left for us to fend for ourselves. We cry ourselves to sleep. There is silence.


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Kami (Kidsey) - 3/6/2009 12:07 AM ET
Please comment, good or bad. I like to know peoples thoughts! Seriously, if you are reading this COMMENT! (Thanks!)
Kimberly Z. (chiKaD27) - , - 3/6/2009 9:58 PM ET
Hope I'm not being rude by asking this, but did you write this through experience? Okay, I just heard how awful that is and you don't have to answer me, but if you want to, message me.
Kami (Kidsey) - 3/7/2009 12:08 PM ET
Well, not exactly from expirience. Most of it I made up, but all parents fight. I have awesome parents, so it was kind of hard to right this. But when they did fight, I kind of kept track of what they did.
Karen B. (SciFiFan) - , - 3/12/2009 5:39 PM ET
Wow! That made me feel your pain. Nice job!
Karen B. (SciFiFan) - , - 3/12/2009 5:41 PM ET
Another thought - since you are concise with your thoughts...you might want to take your words and make them more in a poetic structure. I think you write well.
Kami (Kidsey) - 4/7/2009 10:39 PM ET
Thanks, I'll take your tips and give it a bang. Thanks. :)
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