The Eclectic Pen - midnight my fish


By: Joyce M. (j3m)   + 16 more  
Date Submitted: 8/27/2008
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  midnight you are so beautiful
you patrol the tank so dutiful
ever curious, nothing your nose doesn't need to be in
is it a shrimp, maybe I can touch it
is it a crayfish, maybe I can prod it
what about that Gourami, he's not such big stuff
don't understand what his deal is, I only touched him
the catfish are much more understanding
they do nothing when I drag my flowing fins over them
I'm the most pleasent guy in the tank
I love everyone
I just want to touch them, that's all







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Sabriena W. (hazeleyesrangeleyes) - 9/3/2008 8:16 PM ET
I like it, except where it changes from second person to first person narration. Pretty cute poem, though.
Lena S. (SquirrelNutkin) - 9/4/2008 6:38 AM ET
I really like this:)
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