The Eclectic Pen - The Morning Bath


By: Lori A.  
Date Submitted: 2/26/2009
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Words: 21
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  pale white skin
turns
dark pink
the morning bath
start with a toe
then continue
stop
wait
aahhh
a little more
finally standing
sink
slowly
slowly
pale light
pine trees
snow
quiet
all alone
scalding water
melts away
dark thoughts
a new day






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Sherrill G. (nicljack) - 3/2/2009 5:44 PM ET
i read several submitted by others and am writing to say that your's stood out...nice work!
Kami (Kidsey) - 3/2/2009 7:56 PM ET
Thats really great. :) i love it. its really pretty. you really capture the thoughts of actully taking a bath in the morning. :)
Kami (Kidsey) - 3/2/2009 7:56 PM ET
Thats really great. :) i love it. its really pretty. you really capture the thoughts of actully taking a bath in the morning. :)
Kimberly Z. (chiKaD27) - , - 3/3/2009 9:25 PM ET
I like it. =0)
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