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The Eclectic Pen - Mr. Right

By: Claudia (BrokenWing)   + 21 more  
Date Submitted: 2/23/2009
Genre: Literature & Fiction » Poetry
Words: 84
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He was magnificent. hair like sunshine eyes like the Aegean brilliant, polished, prosperous. What more could a woman want? The tea should have steeped a bit longer, soup's just a little too thick, tomatoes sliced too thin. Document should have exactly one inch margins. Too wordy, too many adjectives, this word, not that. His post-coital critique: oral technique average, dirty talk could be more creative. Like the steady drip, drip, drip of water on stone, vituperation erodes the psyche, carving a chasm like the Grand Canyon. No mercifully quick dispatch by firing squad or guillotine. Instead, a lingering, agonizing demise by a thousand tiny lacerations festering beneath the surface, poisoning the soul with miniscule droplets of venom. Seeing the speck in another's eye he is oblivious to the pike in his own. His first name is Always.

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