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Subject: Poem Feedback
Date Posted: 6/4/2008 9:41 AM ET
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I dabble in poetry occasionally and would appreciate some feedback if you are so inclined, on my poem "Stolen Moments."  Also have a few older poems.

http://www.paperbackswap.com/the_eclectic_pen/view_story.php?sid=1559

 

Sure wish EP would notify you when comments are posted.  Maybe we can suggest it as an enhancement? 



Last Edited on: 6/4/08 9:42 AM ET - Total times edited: 1
Date Posted: 6/4/2008 10:35 AM ET
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Noticed clicks on this thread, but not comments. Does that mean nobody wants to read it or nobody thinks much of it?

Date Posted: 6/4/2008 2:17 PM ET
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bump

Date Posted: 6/4/2008 3:34 PM ET
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Just so you know, it's not necessary to bump up a post when you're already the first in line.

I realize that you are in a hurry, but it won't work. This forum is very, very slow. You shouldn't expect to get a huge number of responses right off. Wait a few days and then bump it up if it needs it.

Subject: Torn
Date Posted: 6/12/2008 1:42 PM ET
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Just posted a new one and would appreciate feedback.

http://www.paperbackswap.com/the_eclectic_pen/view_story.php?sid=1578

 

 

 



Last Edited on: 6/12/08 1:43 PM ET - Total times edited: 1
Date Posted: 6/14/2008 9:55 AM ET
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I liked your poem; liked the ease of reading it; the illustration of jumping out of plane; i hoped the person in the poem would calmly return to their seat; it engaged me.
Date Posted: 6/16/2008 8:08 AM ET
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Joyce,

 

Thanks for your feedback. 

Someone commented to me that there's no need to jump, just land safely and change planes.  However, that's not the way the emotions felt at the moment.   I was trying to capture the feelings of the moment. 



Last Edited on: 6/16/08 8:09 AM ET - Total times edited: 1