The Eclectic Pen - Poem: As written by a Fat Kid


By: Neesa S. (bookwormneesa)  
Date Submitted: 12/25/2011
Genre: Literature & Fiction » Poetry
Words: 79
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  Here's a poem I wrote a few months ago. I really like it. Let me know what you think.


As spoken by a fat kid.

I walk to school every day up the really big hill.
My leg hurts,
Because I am fat says my mommy.
My friends call me "Elephant,"
Because I remember all the math.
When they play Miss Mary Mack,
They say the elephants jump over the fence.
I want to be like those elephants some day,
But my leg hurts.


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Norman K. W. (Norman64) - 1/21/2012 10:41 PM ET
Eh, not sure what to make of this. "My mommy?"
Sherry W. (poeticone) - 2/13/2012 3:45 PM ET
This shows a different perspective on the nature of obesity within our youth. Many believe that our young are simply spoiled, overfed, and lazy. They seldom take into account how the overweight person feels inside. I personally believe that poetry should teach us something about our basal nature. This piece accomplishes that goal admirably. Excellent job!
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