The Eclectic Pen - red haiku #4


By: IONE L. (zaneygraylady)   + 85 more  
Date Submitted: 3/18/2007
Last Updated: 5/22/2007
Genre: Literature & Fiction » Poetry
Words: 12
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  a red cardinal sitting
on a bare brown tree branch
colors this grey day


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Judy M. (foreveramom) - 3/18/2007 6:45 PM ET
I can see it! Thank you!
Susie W. (swhite) - 3/19/2007 12:04 AM ET
Cool alliteration.
Marta J. (booksnob) - 3/19/2007 3:01 PM ET
You are really good with haiku, Ione.
Ruth T. (RuTemple) - 3/20/2007 11:47 AM ET
Thank you - lovely reading on a rainy day.
Maggie M. - 3/30/2007 12:19 AM ET
I like this poem a lot, but I would like to see a more dynamic word substituted for "colors" in the last line. Also (not that it really matters) is it a haiku if it doesn't follow the syllable scheme of 5-7-5?
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