The Eclectic Pen - Short and Sweet


By: Kathleen N. (Katylovesbooks)  
Date Submitted: 4/26/2007
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  I'd rather have life short and sweet instead of long and miserable like it is now. I feel so old. Have you ever thought that if one more thing goes wrong you'll crumble and fall to the floor in a pile of dust? 18, mind you, not even 18 and already I long for the contentment of death. This hideous joke I call my life is somewhat ludicrous. How I hate to believe that this is me. To pretend it all away is my only means of escape. How can one take flight from the indictment you've had sense birth. If I ran, my mind and body would soon follow. So close would be this tasteless chase. The horror of seeing not even one inch come between me and myself would be to much for me to endure. If just for a moment I could be without being or knowing myself I could learn to except my fate. Will it help if I solicit in front of God for something, anything to change or alter this imperfection I call my life. How can I learn to merge with everyone when I feel so decomposed being who I am. How naked I fell in front of the world of judgment, how minuet I must be in the whole of the Earth. I say this to place fact upon this page. To lie while faced with a wound so rude and rough would be defacing. Nor do I amplify me disillusionment for I am unimportant and to enlarge this into monstrous proportion would be to say I think I'm more important then my essence really is. I must now be beginning to sound adrift, but keep in mind I'm ill prepared for such grievous truths. I fear I am beginning to tremble with the idea that there is no escape and I must admit that this is it!


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Marta J. (booksnob) - 4/26/2007 5:34 PM ET
I promise it gets better. You're obviously an intelligent young woman with so much ahead of you. I know this sounds trite, but please, please hang in there. Keep writing and we'll keep reading.
IONE L. (zaneygraylady) - 4/26/2007 10:02 PM ET
You are a passionate young woman who feels deeply. Keep writing and reading. Try to read uplifting books. I used to feel just like you. It gets better and worse and better again. That's life. Love it anyway.
Kathleen N. (Katylovesbooks) - 4/26/2007 10:13 PM ET
Guys I am the writer of this and I am so sorry to have worried you! I am 32 years old mother of 3 and I just made this up. Please Please forgive me, I should have put in there it was not real.
IONE L. (zaneygraylady) - 4/26/2007 10:15 PM ET
good writing then
IONE L. (zaneygraylady) - 4/26/2007 10:17 PM ET
The same thing has happened to me. From my writing you may think that I am a man hater who has had an abortion and my dad was a drunk and my husband beat me. Not true
Maggie M. - 4/27/2007 7:46 AM ET
Sorry, but not such good writing...YET. All through this piece I kept thinking, this is one highly precocious 18-year-old with terminal cancer or something. It simply didn't ring true for me.It's clear you have a lot of talent, but it needs training, development and inspiration. I suggest a good writing workshop class. Just MHO.
Kathleen N. (Katylovesbooks) - 4/27/2007 8:36 AM ET
Maggie Thank you for your input I totally agree! I have no training and would someday love to take a class. I always wondered how someone gains experience with writing. Maybe a class would help! Katy
Shirley C. - 4/27/2007 7:04 PM ET
soulful...sorrowful...soulful...emotion evoking
JOYCE W. (luvthemgoats) - 4/27/2007 11:03 PM ET
You had me believing this, I am so glad you are not a suicidal teenager. Life seems so hard at that age, I just pray they hang in there because it does get better
Linda S. (Dreamin1) - 4/29/2007 3:36 AM ET
It felt to me like a philisophical/religious slant on life, yet it seemed that the narrator was considering an alternative perspective. It feels like a struggle which is not foreign to most of us. It's interesting in that way, at least for me. A question arises. I wonder if we can ever be comfortable with not knowing all there is to know about life...furthermore..which life? This one? Another? Another reality? Interesting short story. I can see how this could be made into a longer more detailed one. Write what moves you. It doesnt have to be perfect for a rough draft. Later you can edit it, revise it, cut out the unnecessary. it's all good since it becomes a resource for building your story. The writing class would definately help. ..whether it be fiction or non fiction writing class.
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