The Eclectic Pen - Spring haiku


By: ROBERT J.   + 7 more  
Date Submitted: 3/21/2007
Genre: Literature & Fiction » Poetry
Words: 29
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buds tight as little fists
pressure of sap
a groaning under
the ground


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Lynn B. (seraphina) - 3/21/2007 9:44 PM ET
I like this it makes me feel hopeful.
IONE L. (zaneygraylady) - 3/21/2007 10:07 PM ET
love it
Tom A. (TomsBooks333) - 3/22/2007 7:59 AM ET
I like this haiku, you can feel it!
Marta J. (booksnob) - 3/23/2007 10:16 AM ET
You really captured the essence of the beginning of Spring (something I always miss as a transplanted New Englander in Texas...) Thanks!
Maggie M. - 3/31/2007 2:55 AM ET
I love this. Can't say why, but I do. Well, maybe I can say a little: It has an unexpected tension, especially in contrast with the title, which leads one to expect something gentle and--oh, I don't know--"wondrous"? But instead it speaks of struggle, and of course it's the struggle of birth, which, after all, is what spring is all about. Not chirping birdies and flitting butterflies. That's why I like it. ;)
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