The Eclectic Pen - Union


By: Claudia R. (BrokenWing)   + 21 more  
Date Submitted: 8/7/2008
Genre: Literature & Fiction » Poetry
Words: 68
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  I want to sustain myself from your breaths,
Sip passion from your lips,
Wrap my limbs about you,
Envelop every part of you,
Absorb you through my pores,
Inhale your spicy scent,
Get drunk on your heady taste,
leave my imprint on your soul.
I want you so deep inside me
I don't know where I end
and you begin.
Fill me with your essence;
I want to give you
more pleasure than you can bear,
lose myself in you,
meld our souls.


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Claudia R. (BrokenWing) - 8/7/2008 12:41 PM ET
I appreciate comments.
Cam H. (cmh0114) - 8/8/2008 9:39 AM ET
Pretty good, but it'd be better if there were more rhythm in it, and maybe even some rhymes.
Claudia R. (BrokenWing) - 8/8/2008 11:22 AM ET
sorry. Don't do rhymes. I was going for a desperate, breathless pace in this one. Did I achieve it.
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