The Eclectic Pen - i'm on my way out


By: ericjasongastelum   + 52 more  
Date Submitted: 9/15/2010
Last Updated: 9/15/2010
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  waiting patiently for the alarm to go off i cannot help but to absorb all the sights, all the sounds. i cannot help but to feel alone in a place that i call "home". a woman walks past me, but all i see is a body wrapped in cloth waiting to die, a body i've licked many times and an body that has brought me favor many times, i could draw every inch of her from memory. she looks at me and tells me that she loves me and i stare blankly into the past and try to piece everything together. i try to find out why this life is only viewable through my own eyes. i wait a few seconds and chew on her words "i love you so much, Baron." i dice it up until all the words are colors and until i finally arrive at an image in my mind, the image is: i am her and i am telling myself that i love myself just as deeply as she has come to love me. just then the alarm goes off and i let out a scream as she takes a razor and gently slides it against my throat and suddenly i feel the warmth, and i see the light, i slip in and out of this life that i have come to know so very well. my senses feel alive and my brain cannot keep its composure. i want to confuse, i want to cry, i want to love, i want to cut, i want to be careful, i want to vomit, i want to run out of oxygen, i want to itch, i want to moan, i want to see, i want to stay, i want to ejaculate, i want to passion, i want to touch, i want to hurt, i want to drown, i want to kill, i want to defecate, i want to talk, i want to sex, i want to explore,

i want to

feel

.


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Marta J. (booksnob) - 9/16/2010 8:15 PM ET
Welcome back. You always give me a tazer-like jolt! Love it.
Kathie B. (kathieblog) - - 9/29/2010 11:19 AM ET
"i dice it up until all the words are colors and until i finally arrive at an image in my mind" probably the most evocative, most truth telling line in this short and sweet tale, even above and beyond the barrage of images the reader is specifically left with the last two and a quarter lines. Nicely done.
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