The Eclectic Pen - My daughter and the kidnapped


By: Stacy B. (stori)   + 4 more  
Date Submitted: 7/6/2008
Last Updated: 7/6/2008
Genre: Mystery, Thriller & Suspense » Mystery
Words: 413
Rating:


  It was all I could remember....... it was the first day of the rest of my life....... or was it the last? All I could remember was hearing my own heartbeat through my skull. Screaming through the top of my lungs. Calling for anyone that that thing in the water was living........ and was mine.......

On vacation in California with my family. My dream vacation with my unbelievable husband that got us these tickets on the fist class flight to my dream vacation home on the beach. It was beautiful. Just simply wonderful. Until late last night. I was sleeping soundly with my husband when I heard glass break..... my child screaming...... the silence. I could not have gotten up quicker. I ran to the children room and found a puddle of blood on the floor.... the window broken...... and a piece of Victoria's small night gown attached to the window.
I can remember running down the streets....... screaming her name. Everyone coming out of the house to see what happened. Then I stopped and fell to my knees in the middle of the street and cried at what seemed like rivers of tears. The sparkling stars shinned right through me. The cars stopped (although olny one or two cars came) the next morning I was looking out to the beach. I saw a green bag float up to the water. Then I saw...... a hand. Then bubbles. I ran in the water and knew that it was my little girl in there. I was screaming and tearing through the bag. And finding Victoria dead.
I woke up in a white room. I thought for sure I screamed so much that I died.but then a doctor walked up. She told me that I was unconscious when someone found me. And that my daughter. My olny daughter.....was......DEAD.
I couldn't move,talk,or hardly breathe. then when I finally saw my husband I held him tight, so tight. I told him something I can't remember. But I think it was,"It's not our fault."
Then he was crying uncontrollably. I tried to stop him from crying tell him that what happened was not his fault, but................ he told me something. Something terrible that I would never ever think would he do.





....................TO BE CONTINUED....................




If you liked this story please comment so I can write a sequal


The Eclectic Pen » All Stories by Stacy B. (stori)

Member Comments


Leave a comment about this story...




Comments 1 to 10 of 10
Joyce M. (j3m) - 7/6/2008 2:32 PM ET
this is heart wrenching
Stacy B. (stori) - 7/6/2008 3:18 PM ET
hey
Angela D. (jaylou) - 7/6/2008 7:40 PM ET
OOO i cant wait, i need more more more!!! this is too intense.
ericjasongastelum - 7/8/2008 8:43 AM ET
feed me like the birds, chomp up the worm and let me taste more.
Tim S. (rocketfan) - 7/8/2008 1:07 PM ET
Pretty good. Continue the story I am interested in knowing what he did.
Stacy B. (stori) - 7/17/2008 7:21 PM ET
please check out my other stori* called kemia and I
Roy B. (mountdewboy) - 7/18/2008 11:02 PM ET
Why u lease us all HANGING... there has to be so much more.... ;) Add to it..
Brenda O. (brendabreweroliver) - 8/20/2008 11:40 PM ET
Is the Husband a Scum bag or is he accident prone? Please tell the rest of the storie. This is breaking my heart. I am not liking the cliff hanging part, Please continue your story.
Brenda O. (brendabreweroliver) - 8/20/2008 11:40 PM ET
Is the Husband a Scum bag or is he accident prone? Please tell the rest of the storie. This is breaking my heart. I am not liking the cliff hanging part, Please continue your story.
Kimberly Z. (chiKaD27) - , - 3/2/2009 7:29 PM ET
Hey!!!! Keep going!!! That's not fair!!!!!!!! Sequel! Sequel! Sequel!
Comments 1 to 10 of 10