The Eclectic Pen - Descriptive Paragraph


By: Patricia P. (DancePlayRead)  
Date Submitted: 6/26/2009
Genre: Literature & Fiction » Essays & Correspondence
Words: 64
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  The frigid cold wind stung my numbed face, whipped my frosted locks helter-skelter, and chilled me to the bone. Striving desperately to keep my dampened spirit up, I wearily trudged through the waist deep drift, pushing myself to the limit. Round and round in endless circles I went, hopelessly trying to find shelter before the blizzard consumed my body and unhinged my mind.


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Al D. - 7/22/2009 11:31 PM ET
In my opinion, two many descriptive words cuts the impact here. You might consider reading a book THE FIRST FIVE PAGES by Noah Lukeman.
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