The Eclectic Pen - Evanescence

By: Claudia (BrokenWing) + 21 more
Date Submitted: 7/21/2008
Genre: Literature & Fiction » Poetry
Words: 51
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You disappeared like a breath on a frosty winter day,
Melted like a snowflake on my skin,
Evaporated like a dewdrop on a rose,
Dissipated like a puff of smoke from a match,
Vanished like a vapor trail,
Faded away like the final strains of a symphony.
What magical incantations must I invoke to make you reappear?

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Eva L. (wearetrees) - 7/24/2008 3:16 PM ET

I love the way you honor these earthly phenomena as magical rites...they truly are so exquisite, and so exquisitely sublime, that only the absence of a beloved summons them so honestly in poetry. I can see you imploring the night sky or the foggy morning to teach you such powers. Beautiful.

Claudia (BrokenWing) - 7/25/2008 12:23 PM ET

Eva, Thanks for your very kind feedback. Evanescence is such a great word; I just HAD to write a poem around it.

Lena S. (SquirrelNutkin) - 7/30/2008 7:03 AM ET

This was good I liked it, thank you

Alison T. (alitanna) - 8/7/2008 9:08 PM ET

Once again you really touched me. Keep it up!

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