The Eclectic Pen - Lost


By: Lisa G. (VenusJewel)  
Date Submitted: 12/29/2006
Last Updated: 4/3/2007
Genre: Literature & Fiction » Poetry
Words: 75
Rating:


  A thousand jumbled words
mixed with endless silent screams
A day that's gone unheard
that ends in deadly dreams
Quiet looks of desperation
entwined with broken souls
A hundred secrets hidden
in the petals of a rose

Sadness seeping from the skin
left unnoticed on the floor
Misery locked deep behind
the needed tricks of a whore
A million unknown mysteries
disguised with phony smiles
Unsolved enigmas inside themselves
standing here on trial

A puzzle that's missing pieces
A white rose and a platinum tear
Look inside and nothingness
Is all you'll ever hear


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Herbert M. (vunderbar) - 12/29/2006 8:45 PM ET
Love those last two lines.
Donna C. (darkcoffeeclouds) - 12/29/2006 11:41 PM ET
I know that feeling.
Jadean P. (caseysmom) - 12/30/2006 1:37 PM ET
nice and lyrical
Joanne L. (00JOANNE00) - 12/30/2006 5:11 PM ET
Well done, a very nice verse that makes me want more from the author. Thank you!
April W. (mommyof2girls) - 12/30/2006 5:11 PM ET
Very nice! You should definitely write more...
Jim H. (Pecos45) - 1/1/2007 1:02 AM ET
Very good, Lisa. Lots of depth. One can easily get lost in all the possible meanings. Keep up your writing, please.
Brenda O. (brendabreweroliver) - 6/10/2008 5:04 AM ET
nicely done! Brenda O.
Isabel P. (isa3mom) - 6/12/2009 8:51 PM ET
That's beautiful. . . .deep stuff. Keep writing!
Gussie R. (gussie) - 8/10/2009 7:28 PM ET
awesome write more
Selena E. (Rayne) - , - 10/31/2009 3:35 PM ET
very deep...I love it!
Kenjii H. (Daalmonette) - , - 11/30/2009 1:13 PM ET
I liked the first verse most. Tks for sharing, good job.
Jocelyn A. (alejocy) - 12/12/2009 10:58 PM ET
Its very lovely. I really like the feeling of it.
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