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Subject: poetry
Date Posted: 1/28/2008 1:19 PM ET
Member Since: 1/26/2008
Posts: 5
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fetus(c) "res" m.williams

mama,how are you  today?..okay

cause I'm not sure you are?.

see you 'bout to make a hard-call on my life.

think what you be doing to me

and you?.

no things no work with you and da-da.

in luv for him you make me

I here and he's be gone I saw.

mama,I feel your love..I love ya

please feel me?,living in you.

a life you made see we close now

gimme time,ma's you'd be proud!.

through me he see

but I no like he.



Date Posted: 1/31/2008 8:27 AM ET
Member Since: 9/17/2007
Posts: 367
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Good use of language! It took me a few lines to realize it was all to be one person speaking. I think I got an argument for and against the "tough call"; if I'm wrong, dumb it down. :)