Helpful Score: 1
Nice intriguing read
Helpful Score: 1
This one left me wondering and spooked...
CONTAINS SPOILER
This thing starts out like gangbusters, with the birth of a strange and eldritch child who may be the next step in human evolution, or may be the end of the species. There's a shadowy organization trying to manipulate the child, or destroy him, and the secretive remnant of the U.S. government's experimental Remote Viewing program of the 1970s.
But the book is severely flawed by the lack of editing and multiple, jarring, mis-uses of words -- the heroine "wretches", windows are "shuddered", someone turns over the "reigns" -- and totally destroyed by an apparent break in the narrative at a dramatically critical moment. It was so bad that I was certain I'd turned two pages together.
SPOILER FOLLOWS
One minute, the hero has been caught trying to break into the facility where the heroine and baby are being held, but one of the guards has seen him. End of chapter. (Okay, standard cliffhanger stuff.) Scene change to the main headquarters of the Bad Guys where Bad Stuff is being planned. Text break to indicate we are now back with the hero. Okay, the hero takes down the guard. And the very next sentence same paragraph, even! he is leaving the building with the heroine, the baby, and three Bad-Guy hostages, no less! No explanation of how he dealt with the other guards (outside and in), how he found the heroine, how he got the drop on three (count em three!) other people.
I really thought Wait a minute. Did I miss something?
Nope. This was apparently accomplished by some Houdini-like maneuver which Sears neglected to share with the readers, and it completed the very disappointing disintegration of a promising idea.
So, Mr. Sears, I have two recommendations for you. One: get a copy editor and stop depending on Spellcheck to proof your copy. And Two: when you cant figure out how to get your hero out of danger, spend a bit more time thinking it through and come up with something plausible dont just pull the equivalent of a now-you-see-them, now-you-dont hat trick.
This thing starts out like gangbusters, with the birth of a strange and eldritch child who may be the next step in human evolution, or may be the end of the species. There's a shadowy organization trying to manipulate the child, or destroy him, and the secretive remnant of the U.S. government's experimental Remote Viewing program of the 1970s.
But the book is severely flawed by the lack of editing and multiple, jarring, mis-uses of words -- the heroine "wretches", windows are "shuddered", someone turns over the "reigns" -- and totally destroyed by an apparent break in the narrative at a dramatically critical moment. It was so bad that I was certain I'd turned two pages together.
SPOILER FOLLOWS
One minute, the hero has been caught trying to break into the facility where the heroine and baby are being held, but one of the guards has seen him. End of chapter. (Okay, standard cliffhanger stuff.) Scene change to the main headquarters of the Bad Guys where Bad Stuff is being planned. Text break to indicate we are now back with the hero. Okay, the hero takes down the guard. And the very next sentence same paragraph, even! he is leaving the building with the heroine, the baby, and three Bad-Guy hostages, no less! No explanation of how he dealt with the other guards (outside and in), how he found the heroine, how he got the drop on three (count em three!) other people.
I really thought Wait a minute. Did I miss something?
Nope. This was apparently accomplished by some Houdini-like maneuver which Sears neglected to share with the readers, and it completed the very disappointing disintegration of a promising idea.
So, Mr. Sears, I have two recommendations for you. One: get a copy editor and stop depending on Spellcheck to proof your copy. And Two: when you cant figure out how to get your hero out of danger, spend a bit more time thinking it through and come up with something plausible dont just pull the equivalent of a now-you-see-them, now-you-dont hat trick.
This book is in "fair" condition.
