Jim H. (Pecos45) - 2/12/2007 2:16 AM ET

This is stringing pseudo-intellectual sounding sentences together, Paul. It's NOT writing. Sorry.

Paul H. (nessus19) - , - 2/12/2007 9:29 AM ET

Dear Jim: Thank you for your perspective, Jim. A "pseudo-intellectual" quality some might ascribe to this piece is understandable, though this is not my intent -- and the words were carefully selected to reflect the feeling I wanted to communicate -- the imagery I wanted t share. And, of course, it IS writing...simply not the kind of writing you find accetable or palatable. However, I would agree with you if you feel it is not the kind of writing that should fall under the category "short story." Perhaps it is too fragmented even for microfiction. With a little tweaking, it might be more appropriate under the "poetry" category. Thanks for you comments.

ROBERT J. - 3/9/2007 11:18 AM ET

Exact, precise, perfect.