Lindsay M. (theresacowinmypants) - 4/7/2007 7:39 PM ET
Trippy. I didn't really understant the sequence of what went on, but I liked the imagery you used. I especially liked "Through the snow as fine as sugar/I lost the vision of the rainbow/In pure white nothing is flamboyant" The use of flamboyant in every stanza might be a bit much, though. Maybe up the parallelism to make it fit better.