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The Eclectic Pen - I see her

By: KellyAnne O. (GreenGarnet) -   + 6 more  
Date Submitted: 9/18/2009
Last Updated: 9/18/2009
Genre: Horror
Words: 304

  She gets into her car
checks her beautifull hair
in the rearview mirror

She's smiling
and so am I

I see her every morning
from my living room window

I wake up an hour early
just to see her

I take my lunch 15 minutes early
just to catch lunch the same time as her

I drive the long way home
Just so i can drive behind her

I take my garbage out
at the same time
just to catch another glimpse

her clothes fit perfect
her body is captavating

She draws me to her,
I cannot help it

She would look so beautifull in red
A flowing red, would make her
Black hair shine

I stayed up til 3 am
then made my way to her darkened home

She would be sleeping now
Her light goes off at ten

I walk through her backyard
no dog barking at my heels.

She has no pets, without me
shes all alone.

The sliding door was left unlocked
almost as if
shes been expecting me.

The door slides easily open
and then im hit with it
the smells of her home
Fresh flowers and new carpet smell

She has such a beautifull
And warming style to her home

I make my way down the darkened hallway
To the room on the left
Where she is sound asleep.

As soon as i reach her room
My nose is filled with the scent of her

Gardenia and Rose petals
her perfume is intoxicating
I can hardly contain my
feelings of excitement

Her face is soft and angelic
as she sleeps.
slow deep breathing as her
chest rises and falls

Shes in a white cotton nightgown
Her dark hair cascading over her pillows

I snap out of my trance and continue
with what i came to do.

I reach in my back pocket
the metal of the knife
gleams with the light from the street

No screaming breaks the silence
She was asleep and remained so
When i was done making her beautifull

I looked back to her lifeless form
and I said to myself

'Yes, She does look beautifull in Red.'

Kellyanne O

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Jesse (EddyKrueger) - 9/18/2009 5:56 AM ET
Slasher poetry. Michael Myers would be so proud...
Lena S. (SquirrelNutkin) - 9/20/2009 8:50 AM ET
As I read this I didn't realize it but I had picked my feet of the floor and was holding my breath with my shoulders hunched up lol It really got me, good job!
Don C. (churchboy) - 10/5/2009 6:23 PM ET
Sorry, didn't work for me.
Gina Watts (blackrose74023) - , - 10/5/2009 11:39 PM ET
Hi this story is real good from Gina Watts.
KellyAnne O. (GreenGarnet) - - 11/5/2009 8:09 PM ET
thanks everyone!
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