The author has a nice writing style. Otherwise much of this book was an eyeroll fest that found me hunting for Tylenol around page 30.
Characters don't stay in character, and over the course of the story both heroes make big shifts from their original personality outline. Dialogue for one of the lead characters sounds almost historical which dropped me out of the story more than once.
Author often neglects to describe the physical actions that accompany dialogue, leaving readers to flounder under lovely poetic descriptions of emotional and physical feelings with little idea what physical actions are supposed to be happening...giving an oddly vague feel to sex (and other) scenes. This may have been deliberate on the part of the author to avoid graphic sex, but IMO became more confusing than romantic.
In addition, there's some factual errors that stomped on my reader sensibilities. The sister is a major corporate shareholder, and somehow that means she gets her own office at company headquarters, access to records & daily operations, and within a few weeks begins to help the CEO run the business. Hello, I'm not the sharpest cookie around, but I seriously doubt the real life applications. Individual shareholders are not employees, and do not function as upper management and run the company.
The author has real potential. Unfortunately, I consider this effort 'not quite ready for prime time.'
Characters don't stay in character, and over the course of the story both heroes make big shifts from their original personality outline. Dialogue for one of the lead characters sounds almost historical which dropped me out of the story more than once.
Author often neglects to describe the physical actions that accompany dialogue, leaving readers to flounder under lovely poetic descriptions of emotional and physical feelings with little idea what physical actions are supposed to be happening...giving an oddly vague feel to sex (and other) scenes. This may have been deliberate on the part of the author to avoid graphic sex, but IMO became more confusing than romantic.
In addition, there's some factual errors that stomped on my reader sensibilities. The sister is a major corporate shareholder, and somehow that means she gets her own office at company headquarters, access to records & daily operations, and within a few weeks begins to help the CEO run the business. Hello, I'm not the sharpest cookie around, but I seriously doubt the real life applications. Individual shareholders are not employees, and do not function as upper management and run the company.
The author has real potential. Unfortunately, I consider this effort 'not quite ready for prime time.'
