O.K. I'm one of those people who love a good ghost story. This one sounded pretty good. But it has to be told well. This author is an "inventory control analyst for an automotive co. He likes telling tales around the campfire." That's what he should continue to do. He is the perfect example of why not everyone should try to write a book. His sentence structure consists of one or two sylable words maybe five or six words in length. See jane run. Jane runs fast. Jane is a good runner. Watch her run. GIVE ME A BREAK! Here is an actual sample of his sentences... I'll open to a random page.
"Connie opens the door. They walk in and take a seat next to the bed. Megan looks reluctantly at her grandmother. Helen has lost a lot of weight. She doesn't even look like herself anymore. Megan looks around the room. Dreadful and sad. Sickening and thick."
"Megan and her father leave the room. Megan stops in her tracks. Megan feels as if someone is watching her. Megan has been dreading this day." FOURTEEN times the name Megan appears in one paragraph!!!!! I will give credit where credit is due, but this book actually made me mad. Don't you have to submit manuscripts for approval to publishers anymore or do you just get to publish meandering second grade garbage and call it a novel in order to make a few extra bucks off of the hard working folks who just want to read a decent ADULT novel? Now theres a sentence Mr Shriverdecker!
Don't quit your day job. As a matter of fact, get another job so you won't have time to write any more crap.
"Connie opens the door. They walk in and take a seat next to the bed. Megan looks reluctantly at her grandmother. Helen has lost a lot of weight. She doesn't even look like herself anymore. Megan looks around the room. Dreadful and sad. Sickening and thick."
"Megan and her father leave the room. Megan stops in her tracks. Megan feels as if someone is watching her. Megan has been dreading this day." FOURTEEN times the name Megan appears in one paragraph!!!!! I will give credit where credit is due, but this book actually made me mad. Don't you have to submit manuscripts for approval to publishers anymore or do you just get to publish meandering second grade garbage and call it a novel in order to make a few extra bucks off of the hard working folks who just want to read a decent ADULT novel? Now theres a sentence Mr Shriverdecker!
Don't quit your day job. As a matter of fact, get another job so you won't have time to write any more crap.
