The Eclectic Pen - The First Rain


By: Kimberly Z. (chiKaD27) - ,   + 2 more  
Date Submitted: 3/3/2009
Last Updated: 3/10/2009
Genre: Humor & Entertainment
Words: 161
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  You know that moment, when the earth smells of rain, even though the pavement is about as dry as a summer in Arizona, and you can just sense the oncoming torrent of wind and rain, and the gentle breeze is barely taunting you with the promise of rain, the smell just barely touching your mouth before being swept away? When the clouds hold their head high in the sky, huge from the accumulated water, fit to burst, and it's just about to rain, and the clouds are trying to hold onto the rain, even though you and they know that they will inevitably lose the battle, and the whirlwind of liquid will come pouring down onto the expectant earth.The world is bursting of excitement and anticipation, waiting for that glorious moment when the first raindrops of the season come crashing down upon the expectant earth, and the earth releases a collective sigh, basking in the glory that is the first rain.


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Kimberly Z. (chiKaD27) - , - 3/3/2009 9:24 PM ET
Okay, this is my first story, so please leave a comment, whether good or bad, and let me know what's on your mind when you read this. Thanks!!!
Kami (Kidsey) - 3/3/2009 9:24 PM ET
YAY!
Joyce M. (j3m) - 3/3/2009 9:55 PM ET
I like how it rushes along.
Kerry M. (eduman) - 3/5/2009 5:20 PM ET
Very nice... you just moved me from hopeful to desperate for the coming of spring!
Kami (Kidsey) - 3/6/2009 12:06 AM ET
Its really nice, but I feel like it's a copy of my own (The Storm). It's most likely not, but for me it feels like it. Maybe you can kinda relate to that.
Kami (Kidsey) - 3/7/2009 6:04 PM ET
p.s. you use rain a bit too much. Can you think of any other words?? :)
Kimberly Z. (chiKaD27) - , - 3/10/2009 11:24 PM ET
yes, i can think of other words! i'll fix that. i did NOT copy!!!!! you know me better than that!!!!!
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