The Eclectic Pen - Upon Reading That Tipping Is No Longer Allowed At Starbucks


By: Marla Maye L. (WalnutStreetBooks)   + 14 more  
Date Submitted: 11/19/2008
Last Updated: 11/27/2008
Genre: Humor & Entertainment » Humor
Words: 102
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  What is to prevent one from accidentally leaving some change on the counter?

What are they supposed to do, throw it in the trash?

"Ma'm you left a dollar."

"No, that is not my dollar."

"No, it is your dollar, here take it. I can not accept tips."

"NO. That is not my dollar."

"Please ma'm, take the dollar. I can not accept tips."

"IT IS NOT MY DOLLAR!"

Big fight, bagels get thrown, mocha latte all over the floor.

Police come, it makes the local papers and then the national news.





Excuse me, I feel the sudden need for coffee.




Reminder to self; make sure the photographer captures my best side.




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Justina C. (stinasstoryspot) - 11/19/2008 6:28 PM ET
Hehehe... This is funny :D
Carly C. (ccwriter) - 11/20/2008 10:12 AM ET
Marla Maye, I love the way your mind works!
Danielle W. - 11/20/2008 5:18 PM ET
oh. wow.
Joyce M. (j3m) - 11/20/2008 6:05 PM ET
very funny; it's like a Saturday Night Live skit
Marla Maye L. (WalnutStreetBooks) - 11/20/2008 10:28 PM ET
The author says: I have the most trouble ending my pieces. This started out as a comment to another persons's post, on Club Member's Thoughts. I tweaked it a bit, when I bought it here. I put the ending on here. I don't know how I could have ended it better. Anytime anyone wants to make a constructive comment on how I could improve any of my writings, I would be happy to hear that.
xengab - 11/21/2008 1:05 PM ET
"Big fight, bagels get thrown, mocha latte all over the floor." Rather then mocha latte all over the floor, try mocha latter splattered or splashed all over the floor, since this is an aggressive line of a big fight. "What is to prevent you from accidentally leaving some change on the counter?" Prevent you change to prevent me from.. since the rest of the story is about a character. "Police come, it makes the local papers and then the national news." Police come, it makes the local papers, now I'm in the national news, would flow with the story better. Note to self do not mess with Marla Maye and tipping coffee store workers..LOL Great take on a such a recent topic.
Marla Maye L. (WalnutStreetBooks) - 11/21/2008 4:12 PM ET
Pam, Thanks for you advice. I will look at retyping this to see if I like it the way you suggest.
Lenore M. (bookstacks) - 12/16/2008 7:09 PM ET
If you're not sure of an ending, just keep rewriting it. But you'll need to find some way to save drafts if this is where most of yorr writing gets done. Sooner or later you'll find one that really feels like it fits
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